As a pser,my aspirations

zhantao0218

这次我打算写一篇英语的文章来说说我的心声,有错的话请别喷
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   I am a pser,but I only 14 years old.I touch spinning is on 11.11.At that time , I think to be a pser is very simple,because I have the ability to control it.Some days later,I found my thought is wrong.Actually to be a pser is very difficult,to be a top pser is more and more difficult.
/ a" o% q7 s6 j6 d! a    At first time,I cost 2 days to study tan.I start thing should I continue spinning?May be I haven't the ability to be a pser.So I will give up spinning
$ _8 P" U2 v+ e  D; _    But I don't give up and I try my best to spining.Because I was keen on spining.I found spining is very interesting,it can make me play computer game less .And I wasn't feel lonely at that time, I carry my pen everywhere,Even I go to toilet.
    So many people will thing me is stupid.But I don't care.Or ,I will do the best to prove me is right.
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    I want to tell something to all the psers
9 A% F! K$ @' E& F9 h; x: W    If you keen on spining,you mustn't give,or you must try your best to do it
    If you want to be a top pser,you must exercise your skill everyday
    If you want to give,you are not have the qualification to spining
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    I have a great dream
/ G6 {) C6 K  ~0 a! A3 F& _7 K    One day,I will stand on the top of the psh,I will be one of the toppest pser in the psh
: M1 V6 {6 q2 R4 R) t0 O    I believe I have the ability to finish my dream.

    Thanks for your reading
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    本文章绝唔复制,转载,全是本人真心话,希望大家看看,顶下,即使你看不明白什么意思
   毕竟我写得也不容易
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2 P; {: l# B5 u! i    如果有什么错,请大家帮小弟指出
    希望给点花给点魂

night_3

第一句好像有错
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    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在11月11日。当时我认为：当一个pser很简单，我有能力驾驭它。几天后，我才发现我的想法是错的。其实当pser是非常困难的，要当一个顶级pser更难。
    在一开始，我花了两天时间开始学习tan。我开始思索：我是否应该继续转笔？或许我没有成为一个pser的能力，所以会放弃。
    但我不放弃，我会尽我的所能来转笔。我发现转笔很有意思，有了它我玩电脑游戏也少了。因为它我不会感到孤独，我随时随地带着笔，即使是去卫生间的时候。
% }' s; j6 C6 k: c4 W; q    许多人会说我很傻，但我不介意，并且我会以行动来证明我是对的。

" j* \  }1 N# x; _# u( u3 X7 P& }    我还对其他psers说：
7 n0 W) g( ]! Y& K5 P% X2 X    如果你热衷于转笔，你一定不能放弃，你必须尽你所能做到最好。
/ }: d& P+ P/ `, O    如果你想成为一个顶级pser，你更要每天锻炼你的能力。
    如果你想give up，你没资格转笔。

# p# o+ |( ?# w# ]  f    我有一个伟大的梦想。
) F+ p) ]3 r- q4 g* H& l5 {    有一天，我会成为psh的骄傲，我会成为psh最牛逼的pser。
+ y- s4 |" g4 R: ^2 h% M    我有能力去完成我的梦想，我相信。
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; d5 R' m, w  ?- y" y    感谢您的阅读

542861036

lz  你写的很强 表示看不懂

AT鬼墓

我喜欢你的梦想 希望你能继续为梦想奋斗

乔治P

LZ加油，支持你

lazy农夫

我喜欢nb的你哈.加油!

penlcz1024

I am a pser, but I am only 14 years old. I met penspinning on November 11th. At that time , I thought that being a pser was very simple because I had the ability to control pens. Several days later, I found that my thought was wrong. Actually being a pser is very difficult, and being a top pser is even more difficult.
# @. r! U) U# h# L5 J    Firstly, I spent 2 days to study TAN. I started thinking, should I continue spinning? Maybe I didn't have the ability to become a pser. So I would better give up spinning.
* {& i9 X8 [- j; U- P    But I didn't give up and I tried my best to spin. Since I was keen on penspinning. I found that spinning was very interesting. It could reduce the time I spent on playing computer game. I no longer felt lonely since then. I began to carry my pen everywhere, even to the toilet.
    Many people might think that I am stupid. But, I don't care. I will do my best to prove that I am right.
   
    Here, I want to tell something to all you psers.
    If you are keen on spinning, you mustn't give up, and you have to try your best on it.
    If you want to become a top pser, you must practise everyday.
- B/ Z3 C2 ^5 m    If you want to give up, you are not capable to penspinning.

! H" Y/ s, m8 h, K    I have a great dream.
    One day, I can, and I will, stand on the top of the PSH, I will be one of the best psers in the PSH.
; _" R6 e5 a6 R/ z$ G  ~/ ~    I believe that I own the ability to achieve my goal.
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' n/ {# a4 R+ O    Thanks for your reading.
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改完了，没有更改你的任何意思，现在应该一点语法错误也没有了。注意写作时的时态变化以及习语用法。
鼓励是不用说的了，不然我也不会在这花10分钟给你改文章哈哈~~
那么，嗯，就这样。看我多麽乐于助人版主给点分吧！

butterfinger

回复 7# penlcz1024
LZ，LS英语好棒啊
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penlcz1024

回复 8# butterfinger

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    班门弄斧了.. 献丑献丑.. 还有一些小flaw因为不大清楚LZ具体想表达的意思, 就不做改动了..

神经兮兮

第一句好像有错
第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。
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    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在 ...
night_3 发表于 2010/12/26 09:31 PM

                               
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我是小一

      14岁的小男生能做到这样  很不错了  希望继续坚持你的梦想  因为我们拥有一样的目标

     都是追梦人

zhantao0218

但愿如此,我也希望做到最好,英语不太好

tanfengzhi

一望到一大片英文就无心机看了，还好有翻译

617039814

Dream is what people need. As a PSER, too.

ImMortal

I will never give up~even if get to the top of penspining is difficult~