As a pser,my aspirations

zhantao0218

这次我打算写一篇英语的文章来说说我的心声,有错的话请别喷
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   I am a pser,but I only 14 years old.I touch spinning is on 11.11.At that time , I think to be a pser is very simple,because I have the ability to control it.Some days later,I found my thought is wrong.Actually to be a pser is very difficult,to be a top pser is more and more difficult.
    At first time,I cost 2 days to study tan.I start thing should I continue spinning?May be I haven't the ability to be a pser.So I will give up spinning
    But I don't give up and I try my best to spining.Because I was keen on spining.I found spining is very interesting,it can make me play computer game less .And I wasn't feel lonely at that time, I carry my pen everywhere,Even I go to toilet.
8 `- y$ P% y. F' Q5 {1 O    So many people will thing me is stupid.But I don't care.Or ,I will do the best to prove me is right.
   
% U3 x" w0 B' O5 ~    I want to tell something to all the psers
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" K$ \8 Y$ S& x$ L; g    If you want to be a top pser,you must exercise your skill everyday
    If you want to give,you are not have the qualification to spining

3 w0 A8 v" k+ A7 o( P    I have a great dream
3 g) j' F  G$ t* [, h    One day,I will stand on the top of the psh,I will be one of the toppest pser in the psh
    I believe I have the ability to finish my dream.

    Thanks for your reading

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    如果有什么错,请大家帮小弟指出
    希望给点花给点魂

night_3

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第一句好像有错
% e3 G8 u$ w7 d  p第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。

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6 N8 D! R9 @; X, j    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在11月11日。当时我认为：当一个pser很简单，我有能力驾驭它。几天后，我才发现我的想法是错的。其实当pser是非常困难的，要当一个顶级pser更难。
: b+ K' a& Z+ t    在一开始，我花了两天时间开始学习tan。我开始思索：我是否应该继续转笔？或许我没有成为一个pser的能力，所以会放弃。
3 Y" _* G5 S! |5 m8 U9 x& A    但我不放弃，我会尽我的所能来转笔。我发现转笔很有意思，有了它我玩电脑游戏也少了。因为它我不会感到孤独，我随时随地带着笔，即使是去卫生间的时候。
) ]* I) r! B6 E# g2 f9 e# @    许多人会说我很傻，但我不介意，并且我会以行动来证明我是对的。
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, a4 D6 L2 u) C- _% ]  x2 R. U    我还对其他psers说：
    如果你热衷于转笔，你一定不能放弃，你必须尽你所能做到最好。
    如果你想成为一个顶级pser，你更要每天锻炼你的能力。
    如果你想give up，你没资格转笔。
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    我有一个伟大的梦想。
- F& e  Q1 A/ D    有一天，我会成为psh的骄傲，我会成为psh最牛逼的pser。
    我有能力去完成我的梦想，我相信。
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4 F# y' Z2 C6 X( j6 Y    感谢您的阅读

542861036

lz  你写的很强 表示看不懂

AT鬼墓

我喜欢你的梦想 希望你能继续为梦想奋斗

乔治P

LZ加油，支持你

lazy农夫

我喜欢nb的你哈.加油!

penlcz1024

I am a pser, but I am only 14 years old. I met penspinning on November 11th. At that time , I thought that being a pser was very simple because I had the ability to control pens. Several days later, I found that my thought was wrong. Actually being a pser is very difficult, and being a top pser is even more difficult.
    Firstly, I spent 2 days to study TAN. I started thinking, should I continue spinning? Maybe I didn't have the ability to become a pser. So I would better give up spinning.
+ F" y5 c. R8 R2 m: Y: c$ g; s  H    But I didn't give up and I tried my best to spin. Since I was keen on penspinning. I found that spinning was very interesting. It could reduce the time I spent on playing computer game. I no longer felt lonely since then. I began to carry my pen everywhere, even to the toilet.
    Many people might think that I am stupid. But, I don't care. I will do my best to prove that I am right.
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    Here, I want to tell something to all you psers.
& u' u# R4 }( ~    If you are keen on spinning, you mustn't give up, and you have to try your best on it.
3 i# @2 D" M; s, H5 X    If you want to become a top pser, you must practise everyday.
, N" l% z, s" B/ Y2 ^    If you want to give up, you are not capable to penspinning.
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    I have a great dream.
    One day, I can, and I will, stand on the top of the PSH, I will be one of the best psers in the PSH.
% l7 C5 q7 i8 [9 N6 A+ ^3 H* b9 Y    I believe that I own the ability to achieve my goal.
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1 a" B$ b3 l/ d3 o% T. I; v8 J+ [    Thanks for your reading.
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改完了，没有更改你的任何意思，现在应该一点语法错误也没有了。注意写作时的时态变化以及习语用法。
鼓励是不用说的了，不然我也不会在这花10分钟给你改文章哈哈~~
" `2 d: `* s- O- }. b8 z那么，嗯，就这样。看我多麽乐于助人版主给点分吧！
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butterfinger

回复 7# penlcz1024
% C* {: i1 ^' J3 ?: l- N2 wLZ，LS英语好棒啊
7 k  D" J) M) U  F( }8 t羡慕中

penlcz1024

回复 8# butterfinger

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神经兮兮

第一句好像有错
第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。

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10分钟就翻译完了。。强大。。

我是小一

      14岁的小男生能做到这样  很不错了  希望继续坚持你的梦想  因为我们拥有一样的目标

  `1 Z+ H; Z, v$ Z2 J     都是追梦人

zhantao0218

但愿如此,我也希望做到最好,英语不太好

tanfengzhi

一望到一大片英文就无心机看了，还好有翻译

617039814

Dream is what people need. As a PSER, too.

ImMortal

I will never give up~even if get to the top of penspining is difficult~