As a pser,my aspirations

zhantao0218

这次我打算写一篇英语的文章来说说我的心声,有错的话请别喷

0 r8 |5 V% v, C, C6 k  J   I am a pser,but I only 14 years old.I touch spinning is on 11.11.At that time , I think to be a pser is very simple,because I have the ability to control it.Some days later,I found my thought is wrong.Actually to be a pser is very difficult,to be a top pser is more and more difficult.
  W- v0 y  m7 ?" x    At first time,I cost 2 days to study tan.I start thing should I continue spinning?May be I haven't the ability to be a pser.So I will give up spinning
* o3 L7 {+ |  `    But I don't give up and I try my best to spining.Because I was keen on spining.I found spining is very interesting,it can make me play computer game less .And I wasn't feel lonely at that time, I carry my pen everywhere,Even I go to toilet.
- C" ^" b8 l/ V+ ]7 |; o    So many people will thing me is stupid.But I don't care.Or ,I will do the best to prove me is right.
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- ~- \' Q+ W6 @    I want to tell something to all the psers
    If you keen on spining,you mustn't give,or you must try your best to do it
    If you want to be a top pser,you must exercise your skill everyday
6 F' z$ t  ^# o+ d! l3 S# b! n    If you want to give,you are not have the qualification to spining
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% r" z' l$ U2 n& u    I have a great dream
    One day,I will stand on the top of the psh,I will be one of the toppest pser in the psh
    I believe I have the ability to finish my dream.
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7 T: w' \. d% Z3 o4 O; m% U8 T+ p    Thanks for your reading
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+ m7 F- }5 `3 L; G. Z) ?% i* p3 s    本文章绝唔复制,转载,全是本人真心话,希望大家看看,顶下,即使你看不明白什么意思
! X! Y: G3 x* d# t0 H( d0 u   毕竟我写得也不容易
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    如果有什么错,请大家帮小弟指出
    希望给点花给点魂

night_3

$ U, X# W/ w- d9 x  k# ^3 D; ]第一句好像有错
第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。



    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在11月11日。当时我认为：当一个pser很简单，我有能力驾驭它。几天后，我才发现我的想法是错的。其实当pser是非常困难的，要当一个顶级pser更难。
    在一开始，我花了两天时间开始学习tan。我开始思索：我是否应该继续转笔？或许我没有成为一个pser的能力，所以会放弃。
    但我不放弃，我会尽我的所能来转笔。我发现转笔很有意思，有了它我玩电脑游戏也少了。因为它我不会感到孤独，我随时随地带着笔，即使是去卫生间的时候。
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    我还对其他psers说：
    如果你热衷于转笔，你一定不能放弃，你必须尽你所能做到最好。
    如果你想成为一个顶级pser，你更要每天锻炼你的能力。
" d. V7 Q; Y" G! J0 s    如果你想give up，你没资格转笔。
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    我有一个伟大的梦想。
- D, P* M. k+ \$ @7 a    有一天，我会成为psh的骄傲，我会成为psh最牛逼的pser。
    我有能力去完成我的梦想，我相信。

    感谢您的阅读

542861036

lz  你写的很强 表示看不懂

AT鬼墓

我喜欢你的梦想 希望你能继续为梦想奋斗

乔治P

LZ加油，支持你

lazy农夫

我喜欢nb的你哈.加油!

penlcz1024

I am a pser, but I am only 14 years old. I met penspinning on November 11th. At that time , I thought that being a pser was very simple because I had the ability to control pens. Several days later, I found that my thought was wrong. Actually being a pser is very difficult, and being a top pser is even more difficult.
3 M5 M. v. \1 `% T4 p5 ^  v  `6 L6 `    Firstly, I spent 2 days to study TAN. I started thinking, should I continue spinning? Maybe I didn't have the ability to become a pser. So I would better give up spinning.
    But I didn't give up and I tried my best to spin. Since I was keen on penspinning. I found that spinning was very interesting. It could reduce the time I spent on playing computer game. I no longer felt lonely since then. I began to carry my pen everywhere, even to the toilet.
    Many people might think that I am stupid. But, I don't care. I will do my best to prove that I am right.
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    Here, I want to tell something to all you psers.
    If you are keen on spinning, you mustn't give up, and you have to try your best on it.
3 A  S$ p4 s5 `, [3 a  _. P+ \    If you want to become a top pser, you must practise everyday.
    If you want to give up, you are not capable to penspinning.

    I have a great dream.
3 M# Z' j% N6 t8 B    One day, I can, and I will, stand on the top of the PSH, I will be one of the best psers in the PSH.
    I believe that I own the ability to achieve my goal.
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    Thanks for your reading.
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改完了，没有更改你的任何意思，现在应该一点语法错误也没有了。注意写作时的时态变化以及习语用法。
+ P& ^+ `1 S0 |3 ]0 k. y6 F鼓励是不用说的了，不然我也不会在这花10分钟给你改文章哈哈~~
5 {  J/ M0 m3 j( g# `7 }那么，嗯，就这样。看我多麽乐于助人版主给点分吧！
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butterfinger

回复 7# penlcz1024
LZ，LS英语好棒啊
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penlcz1024

回复 8# butterfinger

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    班门弄斧了.. 献丑献丑.. 还有一些小flaw因为不大清楚LZ具体想表达的意思, 就不做改动了..

神经兮兮

第一句好像有错
2 q6 _/ Z: Q7 L第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。
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    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在 ...
/ m( `) i4 U: h& Qnight_3 发表于 2010/12/26 09:31 PM

                               
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10分钟就翻译完了。。强大。。

我是小一

      14岁的小男生能做到这样  很不错了  希望继续坚持你的梦想  因为我们拥有一样的目标
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     都是追梦人

zhantao0218

但愿如此,我也希望做到最好,英语不太好

tanfengzhi

一望到一大片英文就无心机看了，还好有翻译

617039814

Dream is what people need. As a PSER, too.

ImMortal

I will never give up~even if get to the top of penspining is difficult~