As a pser,my aspirations

zhantao0218

这次我打算写一篇英语的文章来说说我的心声,有错的话请别喷
6 [) {1 h8 m6 l! n. m( ^
   I am a pser,but I only 14 years old.I touch spinning is on 11.11.At that time , I think to be a pser is very simple,because I have the ability to control it.Some days later,I found my thought is wrong.Actually to be a pser is very difficult,to be a top pser is more and more difficult.
    At first time,I cost 2 days to study tan.I start thing should I continue spinning?May be I haven't the ability to be a pser.So I will give up spinning
    But I don't give up and I try my best to spining.Because I was keen on spining.I found spining is very interesting,it can make me play computer game less .And I wasn't feel lonely at that time, I carry my pen everywhere,Even I go to toilet.
    So many people will thing me is stupid.But I don't care.Or ,I will do the best to prove me is right.
   
    I want to tell something to all the psers
) d0 x: x3 U% P/ L    If you keen on spining,you mustn't give,or you must try your best to do it
    If you want to be a top pser,you must exercise your skill everyday
    If you want to give,you are not have the qualification to spining

: u, M& K8 v1 ~6 C4 C- l    I have a great dream
    One day,I will stand on the top of the psh,I will be one of the toppest pser in the psh
0 s) B4 o# u( O3 u; Q% ~# N: G    I believe I have the ability to finish my dream.
6 F/ \; s+ t* D; O$ e
- U8 i4 k0 Q& M" o/ @  k    Thanks for your reading

* _2 I* n0 B# R+ K    本文章绝唔复制,转载,全是本人真心话,希望大家看看,顶下,即使你看不明白什么意思
+ a- }& T. ]* \  q! _   毕竟我写得也不容易
& t: _' B4 W; U   
    如果有什么错,请大家帮小弟指出
    希望给点花给点魂

night_3

2 j4 G% J. R+ O2 e: t  ~! ?. n
第一句好像有错
第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。

9 J& x- X; @9 }( E7 D

2 c! {, i& E/ j! S: ?2 M    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在11月11日。当时我认为：当一个pser很简单，我有能力驾驭它。几天后，我才发现我的想法是错的。其实当pser是非常困难的，要当一个顶级pser更难。
4 T: n) u* Q6 M, G: j5 G    在一开始，我花了两天时间开始学习tan。我开始思索：我是否应该继续转笔？或许我没有成为一个pser的能力，所以会放弃。
% M( D+ {. G2 c+ \% f    但我不放弃，我会尽我的所能来转笔。我发现转笔很有意思，有了它我玩电脑游戏也少了。因为它我不会感到孤独，我随时随地带着笔，即使是去卫生间的时候。
    许多人会说我很傻，但我不介意，并且我会以行动来证明我是对的。
6 m2 u9 n6 Q1 {+ B/ f
    我还对其他psers说：
    如果你热衷于转笔，你一定不能放弃，你必须尽你所能做到最好。
8 Q5 j8 @; {4 _% N    如果你想成为一个顶级pser，你更要每天锻炼你的能力。
0 }; N0 A/ \! ?+ @0 k    如果你想give up，你没资格转笔。

; c8 ~# \' i& J0 q4 E" g$ o    我有一个伟大的梦想。
    有一天，我会成为psh的骄傲，我会成为psh最牛逼的pser。
8 E! ~* L, U2 F+ T7 }    我有能力去完成我的梦想，我相信。

. @: ?( B- u" e! T! I/ @    感谢您的阅读

542861036

lz  你写的很强 表示看不懂

AT鬼墓

我喜欢你的梦想 希望你能继续为梦想奋斗

乔治P

LZ加油，支持你

lazy农夫

我喜欢nb的你哈.加油!

penlcz1024

I am a pser, but I am only 14 years old. I met penspinning on November 11th. At that time , I thought that being a pser was very simple because I had the ability to control pens. Several days later, I found that my thought was wrong. Actually being a pser is very difficult, and being a top pser is even more difficult.
  D) r% U" _& r3 S4 ^7 W' x9 I    Firstly, I spent 2 days to study TAN. I started thinking, should I continue spinning? Maybe I didn't have the ability to become a pser. So I would better give up spinning.
, H2 z. r( `: z1 q+ a& \4 E: q3 N    But I didn't give up and I tried my best to spin. Since I was keen on penspinning. I found that spinning was very interesting. It could reduce the time I spent on playing computer game. I no longer felt lonely since then. I began to carry my pen everywhere, even to the toilet.
" ~* c% S3 p5 i# L2 L7 B, \% G) S    Many people might think that I am stupid. But, I don't care. I will do my best to prove that I am right.
   
( g; a6 j$ N4 P* A" A    Here, I want to tell something to all you psers.
    If you are keen on spinning, you mustn't give up, and you have to try your best on it.
( p/ a9 o/ S! P* q# U2 R    If you want to become a top pser, you must practise everyday.
5 b* E" L( }% ]    If you want to give up, you are not capable to penspinning.
2 Q5 h3 z. d$ u' h
! j( k5 C% L8 x% b) q    I have a great dream.
. l6 ?. W8 b, t% C4 ?; R8 P+ X7 I. d    One day, I can, and I will, stand on the top of the PSH, I will be one of the best psers in the PSH.
) x* l- B& C9 E& [, u2 f    I believe that I own the ability to achieve my goal.

& ~# a2 t! h4 D) R6 O    Thanks for your reading.
...
! j! U- I  t# ~( E. ]- C8 q# v
改完了，没有更改你的任何意思，现在应该一点语法错误也没有了。注意写作时的时态变化以及习语用法。
  q; O: l$ n( d4 ]鼓励是不用说的了，不然我也不会在这花10分钟给你改文章哈哈~~
那么，嗯，就这样。看我多麽乐于助人版主给点分吧！

butterfinger

回复 7# penlcz1024
LZ，LS英语好棒啊
羡慕中

penlcz1024

回复 8# butterfinger
# D0 Z/ }+ N& ]6 l$ z7 m

    班门弄斧了.. 献丑献丑.. 还有一些小flaw因为不大清楚LZ具体想表达的意思, 就不做改动了..

神经兮兮

第一句好像有错
7 A6 Q+ E( ?5 i- K0 x2 @! X7 S4 d/ Z第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。

" r! t/ _9 p2 @3 t

    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在 ...
night_3 发表于 2010/12/26 09:31 PM

8 N8 m: I5 r1 ]5 ~  F" ?4 U3 }% R                               
登录/注册后可看大图

10分钟就翻译完了。。强大。。

我是小一

      14岁的小男生能做到这样  很不错了  希望继续坚持你的梦想  因为我们拥有一样的目标

     都是追梦人

zhantao0218

但愿如此,我也希望做到最好,英语不太好

tanfengzhi

一望到一大片英文就无心机看了，还好有翻译

617039814

Dream is what people need. As a PSER, too.

ImMortal

I will never give up~even if get to the top of penspining is difficult~