As a pser,my aspirations

zhantao0218

这次我打算写一篇英语的文章来说说我的心声,有错的话请别喷

   I am a pser,but I only 14 years old.I touch spinning is on 11.11.At that time , I think to be a pser is very simple,because I have the ability to control it.Some days later,I found my thought is wrong.Actually to be a pser is very difficult,to be a top pser is more and more difficult.
# c/ Y' n2 f  B3 c    At first time,I cost 2 days to study tan.I start thing should I continue spinning?May be I haven't the ability to be a pser.So I will give up spinning
3 V) l& u+ v) J# W3 n7 g3 `    But I don't give up and I try my best to spining.Because I was keen on spining.I found spining is very interesting,it can make me play computer game less .And I wasn't feel lonely at that time, I carry my pen everywhere,Even I go to toilet.
7 }/ q2 d6 M. K0 i$ Y, ~5 y3 j7 B    So many people will thing me is stupid.But I don't care.Or ,I will do the best to prove me is right.
   
    I want to tell something to all the psers
5 J% @* Q' W9 ~1 u3 N2 P    If you keen on spining,you mustn't give,or you must try your best to do it
    If you want to be a top pser,you must exercise your skill everyday
    If you want to give,you are not have the qualification to spining
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    I have a great dream
4 V, I6 a  k( t1 \) ?9 |    One day,I will stand on the top of the psh,I will be one of the toppest pser in the psh
8 `4 `5 D& m9 W- C, b    I believe I have the ability to finish my dream.
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    Thanks for your reading
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7 K$ f- |2 }4 q: F8 w    本文章绝唔复制,转载,全是本人真心话,希望大家看看,顶下,即使你看不明白什么意思
   毕竟我写得也不容易
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    如果有什么错,请大家帮小弟指出
: \' X, l# ?2 {: C9 N/ |* z- W- M    希望给点花给点魂

night_3

第一句好像有错
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    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在11月11日。当时我认为：当一个pser很简单，我有能力驾驭它。几天后，我才发现我的想法是错的。其实当pser是非常困难的，要当一个顶级pser更难。
; S, q8 _/ Z+ l    在一开始，我花了两天时间开始学习tan。我开始思索：我是否应该继续转笔？或许我没有成为一个pser的能力，所以会放弃。
* a  {* Q! D; T( w; m    但我不放弃，我会尽我的所能来转笔。我发现转笔很有意思，有了它我玩电脑游戏也少了。因为它我不会感到孤独，我随时随地带着笔，即使是去卫生间的时候。
  O, ~& c) ?. G    许多人会说我很傻，但我不介意，并且我会以行动来证明我是对的。

    我还对其他psers说：
    如果你热衷于转笔，你一定不能放弃，你必须尽你所能做到最好。
    如果你想成为一个顶级pser，你更要每天锻炼你的能力。
. y0 w7 n1 F4 x7 o2 {9 ?8 o    如果你想give up，你没资格转笔。
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7 y. e3 q4 K- t- E' |- M    我有一个伟大的梦想。
7 ^. D( u$ q: I) i- M# |/ q  |    有一天，我会成为psh的骄傲，我会成为psh最牛逼的pser。
9 C2 i* `$ G1 e/ q2 H    我有能力去完成我的梦想，我相信。
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    感谢您的阅读

542861036

lz  你写的很强 表示看不懂

AT鬼墓

我喜欢你的梦想 希望你能继续为梦想奋斗

乔治P

LZ加油，支持你

lazy农夫

我喜欢nb的你哈.加油!

penlcz1024

I am a pser, but I am only 14 years old. I met penspinning on November 11th. At that time , I thought that being a pser was very simple because I had the ability to control pens. Several days later, I found that my thought was wrong. Actually being a pser is very difficult, and being a top pser is even more difficult.
% f, r. \3 r& U9 |" O6 ?    Firstly, I spent 2 days to study TAN. I started thinking, should I continue spinning? Maybe I didn't have the ability to become a pser. So I would better give up spinning.
    But I didn't give up and I tried my best to spin. Since I was keen on penspinning. I found that spinning was very interesting. It could reduce the time I spent on playing computer game. I no longer felt lonely since then. I began to carry my pen everywhere, even to the toilet.
8 I4 c' i2 e' p! W* O+ y    Many people might think that I am stupid. But, I don't care. I will do my best to prove that I am right.
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    Here, I want to tell something to all you psers.
    If you are keen on spinning, you mustn't give up, and you have to try your best on it.
) Y/ s' t) N! L  Z* B    If you want to become a top pser, you must practise everyday.
! U8 w5 Q" d! C- l! L    If you want to give up, you are not capable to penspinning.

    I have a great dream.
( W8 `0 v7 q9 v2 t! T4 J9 {$ c    One day, I can, and I will, stand on the top of the PSH, I will be one of the best psers in the PSH.
7 Y' P' Y. N; k1 d/ p    I believe that I own the ability to achieve my goal.
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    Thanks for your reading.
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鼓励是不用说的了，不然我也不会在这花10分钟给你改文章哈哈~~
那么，嗯，就这样。看我多麽乐于助人版主给点分吧！

butterfinger

回复 7# penlcz1024
) [+ [  _3 ]' J3 w1 e5 tLZ，LS英语好棒啊
羡慕中

penlcz1024

回复 8# butterfinger
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神经兮兮

第一句好像有错
第二句好像。。。也有错。。。。
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( {8 }; E9 e; s1 y- R, c8 [    我是一个pser，但我只有14岁。我接触转笔是在 ...
3 D1 f* A8 q- h* Y* Onight_3 发表于 2010/12/26 09:31 PM

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10分钟就翻译完了。。强大。。

我是小一

      14岁的小男生能做到这样  很不错了  希望继续坚持你的梦想  因为我们拥有一样的目标

     都是追梦人

zhantao0218

但愿如此,我也希望做到最好,英语不太好

tanfengzhi

一望到一大片英文就无心机看了，还好有翻译

617039814

Dream is what people need. As a PSER, too.

ImMortal

I will never give up~even if get to the top of penspining is difficult~